I think your novel sounds cracky and awesome! And I love that you picked up on the metatheatrical aspects of the play and put them in the novel. My nineteen-year-old self, had she felt compelled to write Shakespeare-themed novels, would probably have just written soppy retellings.

(The thing *I* learned about myself through teenage novel-writing is that I am not actually all that interested in quest fantasy. I kept thinking that's what "fantasy" was all about, so I kept trying to write them, but spent zero time on the magical objects, or why anyone would be looking for them, and just wrote about various characters meeting each other.)